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Can I make a minor formatting suggestion? The Wall O' Text is hard to read, at least for me. It would be much easier to read if every sentence were on its own line, a la Free Verse. Alternatively, breaking it into paragraphs, separated by blank lines and/or tab indention, would also make it easier to read. But it "feels" very much like Free Verse to me, hence my initial thought. Individual lines may also help you, as the author, get a better feel for the "flow" and maybe what changes could be made, to add or remove a syllable, to make the metre "flow" better. But nothing stood out to me. Overall I thought it was pretty good.