I liked it. Needs more precision, though. Present tense up to: Then past tense from Fucks up your narrative. The fish also starts out as "he" but becomes "it" within a paragraph. Pronouns are a choice; make it and make it with a vengeance. Who, what, when, where, why. Make it clear in your head before you write it, so it will be clear to your audience. The what where and why are all clear in what you present, but you diminish the impact of the fish's suffering by not settling on a gender. We're also bouncing between "Yet here I am, at the end of this dock" and "I took my last cast" and "He would grill them up that night." Never cheat your words. They deserve to be perfect.I remain on the dock as Andy paddles out to the drop off. I watch as he pulls up one, two, three a half dozen small mouthed bass in to his boat.
The last strings of pink and violet danced across the water.
Awesome advice, thank you kb. onehunna also pointed out my change in tense. I'm learning as I go and your advice really helps.