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thenewgreen  ·  4375 days ago  ·  link  ·    ·  parent  ·  post: Story Club Part X

    Also, at this point in the story, it is night (night fell like, 3 times before lil edited it)
HA! Thanks for compiling this, you rule.

I thought we could use a different perspective than just Ashley's which is why I brought in Pak. I think their two experiences should be able to converge nicely. Excited to see where this heads. You are right, that is a lot of characters. Don't forget Daryl Houseman, we've only heard of him, but I guess it still counts.

Also, I don't think I conveyed this well, but my intention is that Pak is seeing Ashley run away from the chancellor in pursuit of her antler. Kind of a rewind showing the event from his perspective.





humanodon  ·  4375 days ago  ·  link  ·  

Oh right, crap. Well, you brought the brother in right at the beginning ("nuke'em") right? Anyway, keeping track of this stuff is what a single person would do (and have trouble with) while writing a story, I know I have. Hopefully it'll help us!

Edit: List updated

thenewgreen  ·  4375 days ago  ·  link  ·  

Yep, I sort of always thought I'd like to bring her brother in to it. I would also mention in your notes, which I think are very valuable btw, the marbles that were left to Pak by his grandfather. Thanks for the compliment on the names. I just looked up native american remedies and they stuck out to me as interesting names for herbs/roots.

humanodon  ·  4375 days ago  ·  link  ·  

I lost the marbles at 2 a.m. I'll add them.